Hello my name is Hildegard Schmidt. I’m here with the princess Nathalia Mirnoff. I’m from Germany. I’m on the train because the princess has met some friends, and I must say that it is disgusting. The train is dark, cold and brown. It is very crowded on the train. The corridor is very small and there are no lamps. The windows are dirty of dust. The beds look like a children’s home beds. The floor is muddy and dirty because the shoes has been there. Everything is old and disgusting. I don’t understand why a princess want to be on this train. But it is her choice I think. Mr Rachett has been murded tonight. But I don´t care about him. Actually I love it. I have always hate him and that was good for him to die since he wasn’t nice to me at all. There is a loose murder on the train but I dont care. Now I want to tell you the story about the night when Mr Rachett was murded.
In this blog you meet fictional passengers who describe their experiences on a made-up journey with the Taurus Express.
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- Colonel George Arthur (3)
- Conductor Luis Henry (3)
- Countess Helena André (2)
- Cyrus Hardman (5)
- Dr Constantine (3)
- Edward Masterman (3)
- Emily Landrake (4)
- Greta Ohlsson (3)
- Hector MacQueen (4)
- Hildegard schimdt (4)
- Hugo Pitcher (4)
- Lily Blake (2)
- M Bouc (3)
- Maid Sue Watson (4)
- Maid Wendy Lewis (3)
- Marco Foscarelli (3)
- Mary Debenham (3)
- Miss Swanson (2)
- Mrs Harriet Hubbard (4)
- Mrs Laura Smith (1)
- Peter Smith (2)
- Pierre Michel (3)
- Princess Nathalia Mirnoff (3)
- Robert Janson (5)
- Samuel Ratchett (4)
- Waitress Sarah Walker (3)
tisdag 29 januari 2013
Hildegard Schmidt
Hello my name is Hildegard Schmidt. I’m here with the princess Nathalia Mirnoff. I’m from Germany. I’m on the train because the princess has met some friends, and I must say that it is disgusting. The train is dark, cold and brown. It is very crowded on the train. The corridor is very small and there are no lamps. The windows are dirty of dust. The beds look like a children’s home beds. The floor is muddy and dirty because the shoes has been there. Everything is old and disgusting. I don’t understand why a princess want to be on this train. But it is her choice I think. Mr Rachett has been murded tonight. But I don´t care about him. Actually I love it. I have always hate him and that was good for him to die since he wasn’t nice to me at all. There is a loose murder on the train but I dont care. Now I want to tell you the story about the night when Mr Rachett was murded.
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I have always hate him. It should be ''I have always hated him'' and below that it should be ''There is a murderer loose''.
SvaraRadera''She wanted an extra blanket so i returned to find it'' always an when there is a vocal after.
''Next day everyone was scared''.
''Well i returned back to my room'' the word back shouldn't be there.
''that mr Ratchett had been murdered''
These are the wrong things i found in your text otherwise it is good and detailed.It's not just sentence after sentence the text has a theme in it.